For Chesnut there was a first draft. The second (and final draft) has been changed a lot, but the main idea has stayed the same. I didn't like it because the frist draft seemed to drag along, and in retrospect I realised that I was probably spoon-feeding the audience, which when watching a film I don't enjoy either.
First Draft;
Final task script:
Check that I can use small part of a game/DVD.
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Characters
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Props
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Set
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1 (storyteller)
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Bags/sleeping bag roll
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My room
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2 (host)
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torch
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Libby’s room
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3 (body)
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Glasses/drinks
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Kitchen
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Rider/Horse: Libby and Jazzy
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Forest (around stables)
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Parent
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Scene 1:
Outside of house –
daytime – cloudy overcast weather, or whatever is happening at the time…bar
rain. There’s a car parked by the drive. 1 gets out of the car wearing casual
clothes, with a bag and a sleeping bag.
1:
Bye! See you later!
Car drives off and the
girl walks down the drive. She gets to the porch where she rings the
doorbell. A second girl answers the
door.
2:
Hi! How are you? Come in!
Inside the house
1: (while taking off her shoes and leaving her
bags by the front door –on the inside)
1:
Is 3 here yet?
2:
Yeah…How’s Jack’s mudfever?
1:
It’s nearly gone, but I might carry putting on the cream,
just- (in case)
2:
Hmmhmm. (yelling up
the stairs) 3! 1 is here!!
3 comes down the
stairs.
3: (greeting,
friendly)
Hi how are you?
1:
I’m fine and Jack mudfever has almost gone.
2:
Do you two want any drinks? There’s juice, orange or
blackcurrant squash, water and lemonade.
3:
Could I have some juice.
1:
I’ll just have some
water please
While 2 is getting the
drinks.
2: (to 1)
So has Jack finally calmed down?
3:
Of course he hasn’t, he’s a chesnut!
1: (mock offense)
Well thanks! Anyway it’s only because he’s in a new field!
3&1 get their drinks
1&3: (not at the same time)
Thanks
All three walk back
down the hall into the play room
Time lapse of the sun
setting.
End of scene 1
Scene 2:
It’s now nightime, and the desk light is on, all 3 are in a bedroom
lying on the floor, and are now in pyjamas. The blind is down. Scene starts
with the girls laughing. 1 is lying on the bed with feet at the top, and there
is a torch on the desk.
3:
So what now?
1:
Horror stories!
She gets up and picks the torch up and then
turns off the light on the desk. She lies down on the bed again and holds the
torch under hers face, everything else is in darkness. After the first comma it
will fade to just narration.
It happened on a normal night, like tonight, on Thetford
Common. There was a girl, a tourist out on a hike. It was growing dark and she
still hadn’t found her way back to where she was staying. She heard a distant
neigh – like a screech, but the ponies hadn’t been there since 5 years before.
3:
Screams
(back to narration)
They found her body 2 weeks later, no wounds or anything.
And the only thing that was left behind there was hoof prints.
(sound of horse
galloping)
End of scene 2
Scene 3
A calendar shows a few days pass.
Now in a different
house – at daytime. (Libby’s room.) Ambient lighting (blind up). 1 is listening
to music/ playing on DS while lying on her bed. Also has her phone by her on
the bed. Phone rings, sees that it’s 2, stops what she’s doing and picks up.
On 1’s second line it
goes into another narration.
1:
Hey! How are you?
2:
You know how 3 has been missing?
1:
(in agreement)
Hmmm?
2:
Well they found her…
1: (happy)
That’s great news!
2:
Well…not exactly. They found her in the forest. (Pause) Like they found the girl in your
story. (ends call.)
FIRST NARRATION
In a forest daytime (edit to be darker and in
b/w)
Girl is also 3,
wearing warm clothes as it’ll be cold! XD
Panning shot of the
heath/where-ever.
Mid-far shot of girl
walking towards on higher ground.
POV moves forward a
few steps stops (wait a beat then sharp turn around).
Match action to girl
turning around.
Fast zoom in on face
Instant cut to
heathland.
Beat, then scream.
Girl lying down
Slow pan starting from
knees few metres later there are some hoofprints.
SECOND NARRATION
Daytime again (edit to
be darker and in black and white)
Girl wearing warm
stuff/riding stuff (different than from last time!)
Start with mid-close shot.
Slow zoom out.
Pan to L/J cantering
away
Fade to black
END
Second Draft
Final task script:
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Characters
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Props
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Set
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1 (storyteller)
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Something soft to drop camera (if I’m allowed)
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My room
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2 (victim)
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Laptop.
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Rider/Horse: Libby and Jazzy
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Forest (around stables)
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Parent
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Scene 1:
1:
It happened on a normal night, like tonight, on Thetford
Common. There was a girl, a tourist out on a hike. It was growing dark and she
still hadn’t found her way back to where she was staying. She heard a distant
neigh – like a screech, but the ponies hadn’t been there since 5 years before.
She heard something behind her…, and then
Phone rings- mother is
on the other end. 1 can be playing a game on laptop.
Cut to a bedroom -
late night – two girls sitting on floor.
2:
Yeah?
Mum:
“Hello mother” would
be nice! Anyway, you need to get home now, [name]. {Girl one can turn lights on
and open the door. And just wait by the door for 2 to finish her call!}
2:
Ok, I’ll leave now.
Mum:
See you!
2:
Bye…
Call Ends.
2:
Yeah…I’ve gotta to go now.
1:
Do you want a lift back??
2:
Nah, it’s only a few streets and it’s not raining tonight.
Shot of her walking through the forest.
Galloping heard. Girl
looks behind her starts running. Swaps to POV and camera drop.(?) Cut to rider
pursuing her, with camera in the bushes, low angle.
Cut to black
FIRST NARRATION
In a forest daytime (edit to be darker and in
b/w)
Girl is also 3,
wearing warm clothes as it’ll be cold! XD
Panning shot of the
heath/where-ever.
Mid-far shot of girl
walking towards on higher ground.
POV moves forward a
few steps stops (wait a beat then sharp turn around).
Match action to girl
turning around.
To OTS on the horse,
and walking forward a few steps. Ringing starts at start of this.
SECOND
NARRATION
Daytime again (edit
to be darker and in black and white)
Girl wearing warm
stuff/riding stuff (different than from last time!)
Start with
mid-close shot. Slow zoom out.
Pan to L/J
cantering away
Fade to black
END
